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 Everyone around the world is adapting to new and different technology . Technology has become a part of our everyday lives and has  even become  a necessity for people around the globe. Every year, companies(mention a company name) come out with newertechnology , even if  it’s a television that has a screen that is flatter than the one in the previous year, smaller mp3 players the size of a battery, or new video game consoles that make games look as real as the world we are in.

As I was growing up, technology kept advancing . I remember when my whole family used to play the Super Nintendo with simple 2D games like Super Mario Bros, where every level goes simply from left to right. Then the Nintendo 64 came out and Mario wasn’t running or flying from left to right anymore. He was able to run in circles and fly around in the sky and we were in control of everything he did and where he went. Mario was actually chubby with a big nose and in 3D. (put the year) Then the Nintendo GameCube came out and Mario looked sharp. He can do even more tricks now. When the Nintendo Wii came out, Mario was this incredible man that could do basically anything he wanted, like go to outerspace to rescue the princess that Bowser always seemed to take from him so easily. Other games, such as war games for the Xbox or the PS3 are very realistic. The graphics that they use to put into games, such as Gears of War and Resident Evil, are now so amazing that the people, the guns, the blood and the battles look very realistic. 

One thing that technology has changed a lot is the way people communicate with each other. Instead of mailing something out, it can easily be done from home using e-mails. Instead of calling somebody, you can text them. If you want to talk to somebody but you don't know their number, you can find them (on an) online (the web has so many search engines for example windows live) messenger, (take out such as AIM (AOL Instant Messenger) Now, they have) Facebook (and many more). (The website used the most at the present time is (t/o On) Facebook,(.) (Facebook is used by people all ages from 18 & up, everyone is using this method beacuse )you are able to find your old friends(that you haven't seen in years.) Instead of going on AIM to talk to your friends, you can just chat with them on Facebook. I can't tell if people are socializing more or socializing less because they are not interacting in person, they are keeping in touch and letting old friends know how they are and what they are up to.

When AOL (American Online) first came out, people used to pay a lot of money to do something as simple as checking an email. Before, only one person was to go online at a time. If they were home, people had to wait for their turn and not only that, but their house phone line was busy because AOL was using it. Back then, people couldn't be on the phone and be online at the same time. If you would call someone who, at the moment, was using the internet, they're line would be busy. <<This sentence is repeatitive <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 12pt;"> Now, in a household, more than one person can be on the internet and the <span style="color: #008080; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 12pt;"> house <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 12pt;"> phone, <span style="color: #008080; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 12pt;">which is also available for use. <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 12pt;"> Now, people can check a lot of different emails for free through Google, Yahoo or MSN. <span style="color: purple; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> Some people feel that they cannot live without technology, such as phones, computers, and even television. Teenagers need their phones in order for parents to be able to communicate with them. Is it necessary to have blackberries, iPhones and sidekicks for a simple necessity ? Why is it necessary to have a "smart" phone instead of just a regular flip-phone? <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> <span style="color: #008080; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">P <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">eople use online messengers to talk to and communicate and even socialize with people, instead of calling somebody or talking to them in person. People often find it convenient to go online if they need to ask somebody a question about a homework or about something important so they won't have to wait so mu <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">(ch missing letters). <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">Some people don't even go online, they just text the person they need to communicate with. <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">.

Why do people go on Facebook all the time and why Facebook stuff gets sent to people's phones now so that they can know, at all times, what goes on in Facebook. <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">

sharon this essay is written very well - and I love the topic because without this modern technology - everyone feels like they dont know whats going on. Good Job --Bessy Sarceno

Very descriptive, but you're mostly addressing cell phones and the internet more than talking about the actual adaptation to technology. Keep writing more, and write about the newer technology and how it helps and/or doesn't help --randeva simpkins