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C urrent ly,  immigration is  an issue and there has been a history of different immigration issues in the United States in the past. Immigrants face a number of struggles.  Immigrants aren’t here to harm anyone, but come to help themselves and their families live better lives.  There is  discrimination against the immigrants <<[try to find a word other than immigrant] that come into the United States , they are given a bad reputation ,as people that  steal <span style="color: #e24b90; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;">American citizens <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;"> jobs, and people <span style="color: #e24b90; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 12pt;"> who <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;"> seem to do more harm than good. Now, there are so many laws that prevent immigrants from coming to the United States, <span style="color: #5335d0; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;"> this <span style="color: #321ca0; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;">needs to <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;">change.

Immigrants have the idea that America is a land of opportunity, <span style="color: #321ca0; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;"> <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;">they want to come here to live a better life and give their families better lives, but we’re not letting them. <span style="color: #e24b90; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;"><<[ repeated in the first paragraph] One of the major reasons that people from other countries want to move to the United States is to escape the hardships of their home country and seek a better life for themselves and for their families that are in their country living in poverty.

<span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;"> My Grandparents <span style="color: #321ca0; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;">, <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;"> on my father’s side <span style="color: #321ca0; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;">, <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;"> were immigrants that worked hard to <span style="color: #321ca0; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;">give <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;"> all their children a better life here. My Mom and my dad were immigrants and they started their life here at the bottom. They didn’t speak any English. They learned English on their own through the music <span style="color: #321ca0; font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;">they listened to <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;">, such as the Beatles, Guns and Roses and Michael Jackson. Talking to people that were bilingual helped them out a lot and also looking at Spanish-English. They never took courses, but simply got used to listening and learning. That’s how my parents, aunts and uncles learned English—mostly by singing songs together as a group, while my dad played the guitar. It was easier for the kids to learn English because we had to go to school every day with kids and teachers that spoke English.

The laws restricting Immigrants from coming to the United States are made by people that think jobs that belong to American citizens are being taken away. [what do you mean?]>> That poverty rate. At the same time, it can take years in order for them to gain their citizenship.Immigration seems more of negative than a positive thing because they violate immigration laws and are in the United States illegally. Even though many of people in history migrated to the United States for a better life, they keep making restrictions to make it difficult to cross the border. <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;"> In the past, immigrants were discriminated against, especially if they were immigrants without any money. The Irish and the Germans were one of the first Immigrants to the United States. The Irish were very poor immigrants at the time, while the German were middle class and were able to handle themselves better because they had money. There were so many people coming from these two places because they wanted to escape the hardships of their countries and live a better life here, much like the immigrants of today.

Immigrants have limited opportunities in the United States because they take any job they can get to survive and if they are illegal, they don't have legal papers in order to work in a high paying job.<span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman','serif'; font-size: 12pt;"> People feel that Immigration is bad because they’re taking our jobs and making it hard for Americans to find jobs, especially with the economy today. Immigrants have it hard because it’s difficult for them to get here legally unless they marry somebody and even then, it could take them years to get their papers. Many immigrants are required to learn to be independent and learn how to work because nobody’s willing to take the time to teach them. The people that do know a lot don’t have it easy either. Because they are immigrants without legal papers, it is difficult for them to get a high-paying job, no matter how skilled they are. Immigrants might be the some of the people that work so hard to earn a better living for themselves and their families. <<[revise this paragraph, it's very repetitive]

peer editor#1: I think you are off to a good start. Your ideas are clear and it is easy to tell what your point of view is. I think that you should try to vary your vocabulary a bit more and add a little bit more detail to the sections where you talk about history (the Germans and Italians). Other than that your essay was great.

peer editor #2: I think your essay is well thought out and organized properly. Some things you could add to is to speak more about immigration on a personal case. Also I think you should include more scenarios but if not, then an amount of examples. And if any experience with immigration, it can be helpful.