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Most people in the world decided to attend school in order to have a brighter future, better job, and to learn new things in the world. (GOOD TRIPARTE THESIS) But we always ask our self when we're (WHO?)(who are u talking bout ) younger, why do we go to school? Is education really an important factor in a human beings life? How can education help and change your future is it really important to go to school? Education can make a human being a smart individual with a great sense of knowledge. Education is important because it’s not only making a better future for yourself, but >>its making you as a person intelligent<< (REWORD) 

School is not always a Child's favorite hobby when theY'RE younger. It >>isn’t always<<(REPEATING YOURSELF) easy to walk to go to school, do homework, study, always trying to do your best. But attending school can make your life (THIS IS SO CONFUSING) when you’re an adult better bright future. But what can education provide in a students life or any human being? Mananli Oak once said, "Education gives us the knowledge of the world around us. It develops in us a perspective of looking at life. It helps us build opinions and have points of view on everything in life." []. Education makes a person set goals aside your self, it makes you create your own mind and opinions on certain things in the world. Because if everyone out in the real world thought like one another the world well it would be quiet boring.

But what is education? The definition of education is mainly, the act or process of imparting or acquiring general knowledge, developing the powers of reasoning and judgment, and generally of preparing oneself or others intellectually for mature life. Education is also, self taught. According to the article Pre- schools need to be classy it states, "This combination enables pre-school educators to help children to become more socially adept and better prepared to learn []. I believe children should attend pre-school because it teaches a young child how to act around other children and any other human beings around them. It makes the child engage with other children to build friendship and also with the teacher.

As a individual, I really did not like waking up to go to school in the morning, my parents did not finish school and I thought they had pretty great jobs. But I noticed when years started to progress getting a job with out a diploma is not so easy. I know what i want in life, and it’s not cheep. I want to finish school to be very accomplished and well spoken. Mananli Oak had stated, “I went down memory lane to remember all my teachers, my school subjects, the study and the play! I never really hated school. But I have seen many who hate going to school; I have had some friends who did not like the idea of studying in classrooms." []. Most people might agree on the fact they go to school to make a better living in there future which is a great thing. Another thing about education, you can always go back to school anytime. It really doesn’t matter how old you are, the best positive example your showing others is that you’re actually going back to school to receive a better education.

Education might open and close doors for many individuals out in the world.(WHAT DO YOU MEAN?)i dont understand Some people pay in order to have a good or "great" education. But when education is free and given to you, everyone should take advantage of the fact it's free. Think about it, some countries out in the world do not have decent school with tables, text books. Some countries the education isn’t so great but my education is free until I go to college in the future. I know what i want in my future and how I need to accomplish my goals and dream which is to keep going to school and make my future!

YOUR POINTS ARE GOOD BUT THEY'RE NOT REALLY CLEAR. MANY OF THE SENTENCES ARE CONFUSING AND NEED TO BE SIMPLER.