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Growing up as a musician is great adventure. Most of the time it starts while he or she is young and gets amazed by what the drummer, guitarist, keyboardist and etc. is doing. Then that young kid would want to do the same thing and might take it seriously as a career when they grow up. __Once you grow up and get that desire to be a musician and to be a better musician, that’s one of the things you would always love to do.__ ok you started off good Being a musician deals with a huge amount of commitment whether you are  in a band or some sort of musical organization. "Performance programs enhance a student's sense of  self esteem   as well as their   social skills   . Students become a part of a positive group and organization. Not only do students profit socially from music programs, but they also gain academically.” explain this quote a little bit more  where is this quote coming from?  So being in a musical environment is a great thing for every musician. It also takes a lot of work to be very good at whatever instrument you play. It takes practice, practice, and more practice. As a musician it  is  great to listen to other great musicians so you can learn new things and have more of a variety with your own playing. Being musically talented can give you an edge over other subjects in school. " Music promotes connective ability. It is not  just a means of recreation. It increases brainpower." Being musical talented can give you extra characteristics within you as a person. what kind of characteristics? Once you have that desire and passion as a musician you would want to take it seriously and might want to be a music  major in college. Having a musical education can bring you to meet a lot of different people/musicians. "A study of the arts20provides children with an internal glimpse of other cultures and teaches them to be empathetic towards the people of these cultures. This development of compassion and empathy, as opposed to development of greed and a "me first" attitude, provides a bridge across cultural chasms that leads to respect of other races at an early age." explain this quote a bit more where did you get this quote?  Musicians in school have such a passion for what they do and enjoy doing it no matter who  is  watching. “A  high school student   Adams says his favorite thing about the band is practicing and playing with the other students — even if it means staying after school ." I think musicians tend to create such a strong passion for what they do and will practice with others to be better at what they do and learn even more from other musicians. || you could add some sort of conclusion but that's about all i can say. no spelling/grammar mistakes either, good job. Kadin Wisniewski  =0 A  i dont have any edits, but i think you should just say where you get all your quotes from. also explain and expand on the quotes with your own ideas. i think, to add to the essay, you can talk personally about how you started and have grown dylan maida    alright this essay is very well put together, you seems as if you are missing some parts like i feel you should add more, but over it all is good. ooh and another thing about the it's, isn't, and who's, write out the whole word in your essay.
 * __The Musicians __  __Passion__
 * Nicole McIntyre