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Even when I was little, technology was always one of the things that caught my attention. The lights, sounds, keys, and colorful buttons, all amazed me. Every time anyone of my family members got a new gadget, I would be the first one asking questions and wanting to learn how to work it. I think that my generation of kids is the most caught up in all technology that has been coming out for the last decades. I don’t know if that’s a good or bad thing but it can be a good thing because we can be the next people in making these new gadgets. It can also be a bad thing because it is constantly distracting us from things like school work and any other important things we need to do. I find myself using a lot of these gadgets because they help keep me in touch with my friends, family, and help me with my homework since a lot of the new technology seems to now be incorporated in education. I feel like because of the spur of technology, we have all these new advances in things like medicine, education, and even social life. **__ Technology is slowly going to take over humans mentally, physically, and socially because gadgets are now controlling our lives instead of us controlling the gadgets. __**

New technology like upcoming iPhones are going to have a new application that can allow Physicians to review their patient's vital signs from anywhere. Your doctor can get a live picture of the pulsating waves of your cardiac rhythm, respiratory rate, blood pressure, and other stats from your iPhone. Who would of ever thought that an iPhone was going to be able to do all of these creative and unique things ? This new gadget is definitely going to "wow" the public and we as consumers will want to buy it no matter how much the price is. As long as we know that we are "in" with the new style the markets will probably skyrocket will all this new technology. Even people who do not know how to turn on a simple computer are willing to learn because they feel as if they are being left behind and cannot survive our generation without learning. For example, Internet, "Broadband is becoming increasingly important to people's ability to participate in the economy and society," said Ofcom's market development partner Peter Phillips. Internet itself has become less of a luxury and more of a need. Americans and just about the whole world needs internet to work, study, and live.

After June 12, 2009 there was a huge transition of cable to Digital Television. You will no longer have to worry about your television having problems but will be able to have clear television. Why the big change? Many of these people crowd online forums to complain about the new regime. "Why fix something that wasn't broken!?" is the standard refrain. Many people were okay with having there old fat TV's, but then again, society felt like there should of been a big upgrade. If you did not have Digital TV incorporated in either your cable box or your television (which every flat screen TV does) then your television does not work. While having a discussion with my friends we came to an obvious conclusion that this is just another excuse for the government to take our money. They know that TV is a part of an Americans Daily life and if they were to take that away because we need to modernize ourselves then they know that we would really go out there and buy whatever it is we need to buy. There is no longer an excuse for not having a $2,000 flat screen TV or a cable box with High definition.

Besides internet and Digital TV, Companies, factories, businesses, etc are now using different types of technology to help them in many ways. In order to save money, they use computers and automatic answering machines to answer phone calls instead of having to pay clerks or phone time. Don't you hate having to call companies and hear a machine talk for minutes when all you really want to do is talk to a representative so that he/she can answer a simple question? “The company doesn’t want to spend more money on the call, because it’s a cost,” Alwan said. Even if each call or minute was a cost, it would be much easier to have a representative answer a question while a machine asks you to repeat what you just said five (5) times in a row. A huge example of new technology being involved in just about everything is movie theatres. Once you go into some of the biggest movie theatres in New York, they now have self service machines where you just pay and the machine gives you popcorn. They save a lot of money and don't have to play clerks to work 8 hours of the day because they now have a machine that can do it. But a question that can constantly come up is, "What about when the machine decides to break or not work? What's going to happen then?"

Technology has advanced so much that even the sports industry or more closely, the NBA, is now trying to create a camera built into the floor to track down basketball players every move and help record their stats. Jobs will close but will also open. Jobs of people who are doing the stats and camera-men will be lost but people who are making these underground cameras will definitely have a open spot available. "Player tracking is the heart of the new NBA stats collection," NBA executive vice president of operations and technology Steve Hellmuth said. I guess it goes back to the old saying, "The calculator didn't make the error the human did." People might make common mistakes while a machine or camera can't. But what happens if the machine shuts down? You can't always trust a machine to do everything. The world is slowly going to be run by machines. We won't be able to control them they'll slowly start controlling us.

**__Peer editer # 1__**: I feel that this essay was well written because it was written in a way were the reader can understand where they coming from. This essay relates to me because when i was smaller i always wanted to find out about the new technology and always got anxious when someone in my family got a new gadget. Just try to fix the little mistakes and your essay would be great! -Kevin Hererra.